I Know I took too long.. bs sho aswee exams w chee
Sorry !!
Hope u like it .. w sorry if u think its short
I never thought I'd be in love like this When I look at u my mind goes on a trip <3 Missed u !! (K) Hope you love it =D! Enjoy <3 Urs
~J~
I don't know anyone whose name starts with "J"! Who could it possibly be?! I drove home fast and rushed to my room before anyone could see me. I then sat on my bed and opened the wrapped box and it read "Sugar Daddy's Bakery". My mind was full of thoughts; I was so confused! The box had cupcakes in it with hearts drawn all over them. Curiosity was killing me! What kind of mysterious lover sends a box of cupcakes to the person they love?!?!!!
I then heard someone knocking on the door, so I opened it. It was my brother, Zayed.
Zayed: Mr7baa bl 7beeb, ana jahez yalla goom bn6la3
7amdan (winking): Zayed laish mtksh5 hel kthr? Going on a date?
Zayed (acting innocent): Mashay wallah, sayr ashoof el 7abeeba "JooJoo" laish b3ad! 7amdan: Jwaher ha? Zayed: Yup! By the way she told me she saw ur car when she passed by the park, she was supposed to give me them when she sees me but she changed her mind and decided to leave it on ur car in case she couldn't. 7amdan: Good thing u told me! I was so curious! She signed the card J and there isn't a name to say who its for, and I also couldn't think of a name. Zayed: Hahaay a7san! El mhm yalla nseer, I dun wanna be late.
Zayed and I really look alike to the extent that sometimes people mix up between us. They had to look at the eyes to know who it was. His eyes were dark brown, where as mine were hazel. Anyway, we got in my car and drove off to Dubai Mall. As we got there I parked in the Fashion Avenue parking and we headed towards Fauchon cafè. I called my friend A7mad to join me, since Zayed was going to leave me alone so he could see Jwaher.
15 minutes later .... 8:30 pm
7amdan: 7ayallaah Bu sh'haab! Wainek mn zman A7mad: Mwjood bs t3rf el drasa thab7tneh hel ayam, 5a9tan cz I'm in my last year. 7amdan: Bl twfeej enshallah!
We started talking about college life, work, and a lot of random things. A7mad is my high school friend. We were the most popular guys at school. He almost had the same looks, but there were slight differences. He had chocolate brown hair and dark brown eyes, unlike me.
Moments later, I felt as if I was being watched and looked around.
Back to Reem's Perspective
I was walking around Dubai Mall... Fashion Avenue to be exact, and that's when I spotted a familiar face down in Fauchon cafè. It was 7amdan. I quickly texted him so he could look up but he already did before I could tell him. I still texted him, and typed "Spotted you ;)" 7amdan: Reemooh sho tsween hnee? :p Bs 9dfa 7lwa ;) Reem: Nothing much. Change of scenery and I came to meet up with Maithaneh. 7amdan: Ooow enzain nzlee mree 9obna plz (A) Aba ashoofch ;) Reem: Shftne elyom mashbaa3t :P?! 7amdan: La w mst7eel hel shay! Reem: 5la9 3shan 5a6erk bmr twice, and bseer :P 7amdan: Ok 7ubii, I'm waiting..
I went down the escalator that's in the middle of Armani cafè and Fauchon cafè, and passed next to Fauchon, then went back towards Ralph Lauren so I could see him, and then head to the Ice rink area. He looked so adorable in his Armani Polo shirt and jeans. Although I didn't like seeing guys in polo shirts, 7amdan was different! I could accept everything that I didn't like if it was from him.
I was too busy texting, so I didn't watch out for what was in front of me. Blackberry addiction, I bet you all know how it is!!
Maitha: Reemooh watch out!
Seconds later, I saw myself on the ground I looked up to see what I hit. I was so confused. It looked like 7amdan, but how come? He was just at the cafè and his nickname isn't updated yet! Maitha was laughing at me cz she thought it was him too. She knew how awkward it would be for me, but she still helped me get up.
Reem: Huh? 7amdan?! How did u get here so fast?!
The guy started laughing as if I told him a joke. At this moment, I felt mad! Why was he laughing? There's absolutely nothing funny about it, it happens to a lot of people!
Guy: Hahaha, shaklech 7amdan's girlfriend, Reem. Am I right? Reem: Yah, but what do you mean by "7amdan's girlfriend"? Zayed: I'm not 7amdan. I'm his brother, Zayed. We look alike I know; many of our friends can't tell us apart.
Reem (whispering to Maitha): Awaih! Yal Fshlaa! Ma a9adg eni t7raiteh 7amdan!
Zayed (starting to freak out): Why are you girls staring at me?
Reem: Were trying to spot the differences between you and your brother. Maitha: I found out! It's the eyes! Look clearly. Reem: Haih 9dgech... 7amdan's are hazel. Zayed: Zain yom enkom 3rftow... yalla bseer ana 7amdan ytryane w wray emt7an bachr.. I came here for a short break. Reem: Good luck w salem 3laih.
He walked away as we kept staring unbelievably. It was something weird. It was as if he and 7amdan were twins!
We went to Cafè Nero by the ice rink so we could meet up with Meera. As we were waiting, we noticed M7amad passing by.
Maitha: Uff! What's with this guy! It's as if he's stalking us! Reem: Haih wallah a7s feech. A7s 5laa9 malait mn kthr mashoofeh!
(Meera enters the cafè)
Meera: Hi... How are you guys doing? Reem & Maitha: Great. Meera: Shfeekom mbwzeen chna yahal sa7been 3nhom 7alaawa?! Maitha: Mashay shefna wayh mab'3aineh nshoofeh Meera: Lemme guess... M7amad? Reem: Akeed, mno '3aireh y3nee?
Maitha used to like M7amad when were freshmen, but he didn't know about it because they weren't in the same university. He was the first guy she liked so much, so it was hard for her too see him. He sometimes hangs out with me and Fa6amy at university, and that's how Maitha first saw him.
M7amad wasn't that cute. He was just normal.
She then got over her feelings, since she knew it was impossible for her to talk to a guy. It's just no the way she is. Meera and I were the only ones who knew about it.
Meera: Ma3laich mneh... ignore and life goes on! Be cool ya5ee hahaha Maitha: Yah I know; I do ignore, but you know it bothers me whenever I see him. Reem: Methl magalat Meerooh... 6aaaf w tam'6ee el 7ayaah!
Maitha (hugging us): A7ebkom wallah!
Reem & Meera (Blinking innocently): n3aarf a9lan
Maitha: Malaat! Mshkela ely y9dgoon 3marhom bsr3a!
Rashed Al Majed's song "El Mw3d El '9aye3" played as my phone began to ring. I looked at the screen before I answered. A familiar number flashed on the screen. I showed it to Maitha and Meera, and they said it seemed familiar to them too!
I answered to see who it was... It was a familiar voice...
Please leave ur comments =D !
ana ma7b cliffhangers =P
ReplyDeletesame here!
ReplyDeletewaiting for ure next part :D
hehe i think i knew who it is ;)
ReplyDeleteWHAT HAPPENS NEXT ='( !!
ReplyDeleteAM WAITING ANXIOUSLY
You're in need of a little critique. So it would be my honor to point out your mistakes ;) xx
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, I'm down with the whole 7amdan and Zayed looking alike thing, but not diggin' the a7mad-is-also-a-7amdan-look-alike. Seriously? Next you'll be telling he's got a long lost twin.
The story is just screaming cliché. Up until now, I don't see anything special about it. I bet I can summarize the whole story in one sentence.
Boy meets girl, they fall in love, he breaks her heart, she gets a rebound.
Am I right?
Ha! Nowadays everyone with a blog is concidered a 'writer'. Newsflash, this is an insult to stories. It lacks organization. Everything is just pouring in.
Don't even get me started on your characters.
It's like you're in a circle and you've only got so many characters you could use. Dumbest part? You use them all at once. Not all characters have to be present at every scene you know. It's just not logical..
I'm not even going to talk about your grammar and spelling because frankly my dear, there is none.
Oh, and last peice of advice. You might wanna CHILL on the romance thing.. beyond cliché.
Even realistically, couples don't spend all day making googly lovey dovey eyes at eachother. There's at least a little FUN involved.
I apologize for being rude. But I just couldn't bare reading your blog anymore. It's insulting.
Think about what I've said, you might wanna change something ;)
And I'll be back to see how things work out ;)
- Merciless Critic xx
Dear "Merciless Critic",
ReplyDeleteTake this as a goal in life
"You should not follow something if you criticize it" ~ Maryam Q
Let me explain it for you =)
IF YOU DON'T LIKE MY BLOG THEN WHY THE F*** ARE YOU READING IT ?!!?!!!!
No one is forcing you to read it.
lol, my dear not only do I dislike your blog, I loathe it. I'm "F***ing" reading it because I want to get a good laugh at your pitiful attempts at "writing".. All I did was try to offer you some advice, try to help you improve your blog. Guess its hopeless. Have fun at rock bottom.
ReplyDelete- Merciless Critic xx
Merciless Critic
ReplyDeleteI THINK ENCH W7DA 7AGEERA
SHES TRYING TO WRITE HER STORY
SHES PASSIONATE ABOUT IT
ENTIE SHU Y59CH @;;;
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KAMA TDEEN .. TDAAAN
DAYS WILL COME W W7DA BATGOOLCH THE SAME THING AND ULL REGRET !
YALLA I3T'THRY FOR MAREEMO YAL ZFTAH 7AGEERA W7DAH